discuss about darwin and Kalgren, revise the essay and add one double spaced page based on the teacher’s feedback

Revise the essay attached based on the following ques and reading, and add one double spaced page based on the feedback given by the professor,

here is the question:

Would you agree that Darwin’s character or temperament or personal qualities have something to do with his achievements? If so, what are the important personal qualities? What about Karlgren? He wasted years on work that led no where, and ended his life a bitter man. Does he have lessons for us – if Darwin gives us an example to strive after, does Karlgren suggest things we should avoid? To get some direct sense of what sort of man he is, you might want to take a quick look at his first paper, “Yin and Chou in Chinese Bronzes” (BMFEA8, 1936, pp. 9-156, on reserve in the Art Library: DS 714. S7), if you have lots of time and patience! Ask yourself what you make of the article as a whole. Do you have in your mind any particular model for scholarly writing? An idea of the kind of paper you want to write? Is this it? If not, why not?

here is the feedback:

It’s very hard to understand what you’re trying to say, and the parts that I do understand don’t seem to have much relevance with our class or have much substance.

here is the reading:

Charles Darwin’sAutobiography, ed. Francis Darwin.(New York: Collier Books, 1961).