Hi June – I am really amazed at the challenges you
have faced while starting this program. I hope you are ok!
I thought your content of this paper more than
completed the assignment expectations. You have clearly identified a major
“theme’ of the paper and brought in ideas from your readings to support these
thoughts. Your organization is clear and
your ideas are well-stated.
only thing that I noticed that is really
subtle is related to your in-text citations. If you have an entire paragraph
from one source, you would put the
in-text citation after the first sentence of the paragraph. Often times also, ideas that are not common
knowledge will be cited with an in-text citation (even if you personally know it – you have to prove that the
idea is legitimate). So, you will see a couple of places where I put “(CITE)” –
I would just insert a reference here (likely one of the two that you have here.
Please let me know if you have any questions! This is
very well-done – especially given your circumstances.
~Valerie Glass 6/21/16
*****There is a video for this week that explains subject matter which consists of unit 9.
Tips for a successful completion of the Week 11 assignment.
Note: As always just let me know what you need. I will try to get it too you as quickly as possible.
Thank you Brenda.